Hello Kirsten, I pulled up your blog and I instantly knew that I wanted to comment about the design of your blog post. I really like how your background is a bookshelf! This makes me feel like I am in a library reading mythical tales and makes me feel like I am reading from a physical textbook. I believe that this was a great way to give the reader a feeling of authenticity... if that makes any sense. :)
WOW. Your storybook introduction was so great! Doing an after-the-fable look at some of Aesop’s characters was a great idea, and the added component of the Dr. Phil-Jerry Springer comparison was really creative! I can’t wait to see what you come up with—the episode names are a really exciting clue. It also seems like you did a really good job choosing a wide range of “characters” to base the animals on. I’m especially interested to see how you approach the Burro, AKA Jay Cutler. As a bronco fan, I feel like the comparison between this particular former Denver Quarterback and an ass is a really apt one (clearly I’m not a Cutler fan). You also have an excellent writing style! Everything flowed really well, and your word choice was great. You started out with some pretty deep questions, which were juxtaposed really nicely with the humor of knowing many of the people you’re talking about. Stylistically, that’s fantastic! Really, nicely done.
Your introduction is so good! The moment I read the first sentence, I was instantly hooked. And I completely agree with it! You find out who you are as well as who are your friends are during a major life event. The introduction definitely fulfills my expectations from the coverpage, in fact, it was better. I like that you thoroughly explained what Dr. Phil’s and Jerry Springer’s roles in your story were. The questions you asked like “Does he love her? Does she love him?” made me really want to read your story because that’s a question I want answered too! The pictures you used were great too because it helped me visualize the story. However, the very last picture on the bottom left looks like it is cut off. This seems like a small alignment issue that you can easily fix—unless it was intentionally placed! Well, it looks to me like you spent a lot of time developing your storybook and adding details. I love the post-“happily ever after” approach you took.
Your story book introduction was awesome! It had me hooked from the beginning and wanting to find out what it was all about. I love that you chose Dr. Phil as more of a therapeutic character for your storybook. I also like how you threw Jerry Springer in there as more of a “let them fight it out in the name of great television” kind of character. I like the idea of doing an after the fact of Aesop’s characters! It is really a neat idea to be able to see what they are doing now. It reminds me of Dr.Phil and Jerry Springer’s shows because every now and then they look back on old participants of their show. I also like how you gave the character’s slightly different identities by making them hockey players or Supernatural characters. That was a very nice touch. I can’t wait to see the finished project!
Your introduction really pulled me in to your storybook. What an interesting concept with Dr. Phil and Jerry Springer. I like that you already have everything all planned out and you gave a blurb about each story in the introduction that was short, sweet, and to the point to give me an idea of everything that is ahead. Your blog is very pleasing to the eye and easy to read.
In your first story, the use of animal characters really gave a twist to the real life version of Jerry Springer. The spacing in your stories made it easy to follow and keeps the readers attention. Your links work and the grammar is great! The pictures also do a great job at representing what the story is about and gives me an idea to base the story off of. I loved the tweets of your story, too because it turned an older story into a very modern story that our society can relate to. Great job and I look forward to reading more in your storybook in the future.
Hi Kirsten, Your story book is very nice. You have so many different parts that work so well together. Ill start with your intro. This idea is pure gold. I love that these people will be a part of a talk show. even though I really liked the idea at first I was a little worried because a talk show involves... talking and that is something that people have a very hard time writing. However my fears were extinguished as soon as I started to read your first story. You did a fantastic job writing dialog. I also felt like was really watching the Jerry Springer as I was reading your work. your attention to small details, like the blue cards and the security guards, really helped to make me feel like i was there. also your sense of humor was on point in this. I almost lost it at that part about the tweet. very good job. I will have to come back to read your other stories.
Hey Kristen, I have to say your storybook is great!! I really enjoy how you combined the story of the farmer and stork and the jerry springer show. It shows how creative you can really be. Reading your first story really reminded me of the jerry springer show. The descriptive language shows me that you really know the show well because when you describe things, it is what I remember the show being like. I do have to say I am excited to see what Dr. Phil’s show will be like with the story of the farmer and stork. As for your writing and grammar it is great! The spacing and the way you formatted the whole story really helped me keep up with the story. Again I would let you know how good of a job you have done by being so creative in combing the show and the story. Your storybook is a one of kind. Keep up the good work!
I really like your storybook concept, Kirsten. It’s very creative and fun. Your recreation of a Jerry Springer episode is spot-on and very well done. I almost feel like I am back in 7th grade watching an episode after school. I can’t wait to see how you do the Dr. Phil stories. I’m sure it will be amusing.
Your writing is very good and super easy to follow. I did not notice any grammatical mistakes at all. Your stories have just the right amount of detail and are very engaging. I think you did a great job of setting up your stories in the introduction as well. The only criticism I can make is about your character assignments. I’m not familiar with all of the famous personas you chose and it is distracting from your story. I feel like there are back stories with the characters that I am missing out on. Although I must admit that the images really helped me form a mental picture of the events of the story.
Its always nice to read good writing and I really enjoyed reading your storybook so far. I can’t wait for the next episode! It seems like you have a lot of stories you want to tell.
I already mentioned to you how creative I thought your storybook theme was, but I just want to reiterate—great thinking! Seeing how you’ve put that idea into practice is really great. I can’t wait to see some of those characters that I am familiar with.
I think it was probably a good idea for you to put your author’s note at the beginning of the story. Although I think most people are at least familiar with whom Jerry Springer is, giving them a little better idea before you start the story is nice. I have to admit, it was a little confusing that he switched between a human and an animal. But, I think you mostly cleared it up at the end when you mention him learning to switch between forms. I would go back and look over your punctuation, there were missing commas.
Hi Kirsten nice to see you again, after reading your story book last week i just had to come back. your stories are just to funny. like i think that even if i was not in this class i would still read these because they are just that good. the way that you describe everything, I really fell like i am sitting at home watching Jerry Springer. Not only is your writing good but so are your stories. the tweets in between had me laughing so hard I can just picture this guy at work watching this. also #pleasedontleaveme haha. i am glad that you used the new spock and kirck because i agree that they would actually fight like this. i had no idea how you were going to finish this but the proposal at the end was just to good. very good job I cant wait to read more.
GREAT job. I love this storybook. I think it's my favorite one that I've read so far. You do a great job pulling the reader into your style of writing. Your creativity is so expansive and really keeps me engaged the entire time. And not just with a single story, but for the whole storybook. Your images are nothing less than perfect, too. I especially like your use of the tweets. Instead of just saying what they were, you actually included an image, which was nice. The author's note at the beginning of one of your stories was a great touch, too. Not everyone may know who Jerry is, but having this just in case was a smart move. The layout of the stories themselves also made them easy to follow, which I appreciate. This isn't always the case, but your book just seems to have the full package.
Overall, WONDERFUL job and I hope you have a great rest of your semester!
hey Kirsten, I have found my self back at your story book once again. I have been checking back each week after reading for the first time. this is because, dont tell anyone, you story book is probably my favorite. you are a very good writer and your stories are always loaded. they have everything that a good story needs they have good dialog. they are very descriptive. they have good plot lines and they have humor. I am so glad that you added a third because after reading your first two i was hooked. for this story i really liked how you brought a more emotional side. by the end of it i really felt bad for him. but i think my favorite part was at the very end where you say to watch the show on dvd cause netflix changed the music. i never knew they could do that. as always good job and keep up the good work.
I read through all of your storybook in one sitting! It was so good! I've never actually seen Jerry Springer or Dr. Phil, so both were totally new to me. The idea behind your storybook was just so creative. I really liked how you kind of brought these old stories and twisted them in such a way that they are immediately recognizable to those who keep up with the modern culture of today. (Even though I've never seen the shows, I like to think I know what they are.) You are a very good writer. It was easy to see that you are having a lot of fun with your storybook each week by how you write and how the characters and their interactions have a lot of life in them. Also, the layout of your storybook was really easy to follow. It makes your stories a lot easier to read just because everything is so well put together! Great job and good luck with the rest of the semester!
Hi Kirsten! First off, what a cute happy penguin! Anyways, I just came here to tell you how much I have loved reading your work throughout the semester. It is evident how much thought, effort, and editing has gone into your work. I love reading everything you produce, and it is all really good! Also, I enjoy reading your comments because they are both entertaining and helpful! I wanted to go out of my way to tell you that I appreciate all that you have done this semester, and will continue to do :) Good luck with the rest of your academic pursuits!
First of all I am so upset that this is the first time I come across your storybook! What a unique idea! I would have never thought of doing a script mimicking the Dr.Phil show. I watched this show growing up a lot when I could not find anything else that was interesting to watch. You did not disappoint. Your storybook is just as interesting as the actual show! You allow the reader to have so much information that lets us know exactly what is going on. Your images are also great as they allowed me to really visualize the characters. I read over your introduction and your first story. Wow! The first story was in great shape and it was so entertaining. It felt like I could have been watching this on TV. I think that your descriptive abilities are what engaged me the most. When jerry would say something and then there would be a description afterwards it was as if I was reading a written form of the tv show. Anyways, great job! I wish I had more time to continue reading your project. It is so good!
I was impressed with your way of taking something from folklore and giving it a modern touch, such as Dr. Phil. I found this comical at times. It made me think of all of the original storybook characters and how they might need counseling. I thought your layout was very fitting. I also liked how you used pictures of modern well known people in your stories. I was able to set the scene being familiar with TV shows like Jerry Springer. I think this made you more connected to your audience because it is something we are familiar with. I think you did a good job on your revisions. I did not find any grammatical errors. I enjoyed your story book and was always able to get a good laugh. I like your style of writing and admire the creativity it took to turn folklore into a talk show. Nice work!
This week as I am wrapping up my work this class I remembered that there was a really unique project using Dr. Phil. It took me while to find it but I have found you again and I was so excited!! This week I read your last story because I wanted to see how you had finished off your project. Once again I was highly highly impressed with how much creativity you have. I mean, WOW! I could never come up with something as good as that. I really enjoy how you go to the point in what you are trying to say so that we are not too lost in words. However, I wish that there would have been more history or background to the original story and what you did you "change" it or fi your retelling was just setting this original story into the script of a Dr.Phil show. Anyhow, the work that you did was excellent. Good luck with finals!
Hello Kirsten,
ReplyDeleteI pulled up your blog and I instantly knew that I wanted to comment about the design of your blog post. I really like how your background is a bookshelf! This makes me feel like I am in a library reading mythical tales and makes me feel like I am reading from a physical textbook. I believe that this was a great way to give the reader a feeling of authenticity... if that makes any sense. :)
WOW. Your storybook introduction was so great! Doing an after-the-fable look at some of Aesop’s characters was a great idea, and the added component of the Dr. Phil-Jerry Springer comparison was really creative! I can’t wait to see what you come up with—the episode names are a really exciting clue. It also seems like you did a really good job choosing a wide range of “characters” to base the animals on. I’m especially interested to see how you approach the Burro, AKA Jay Cutler. As a bronco fan, I feel like the comparison between this particular former Denver Quarterback and an ass is a really apt one (clearly I’m not a Cutler fan).
ReplyDeleteYou also have an excellent writing style! Everything flowed really well, and your word choice was great. You started out with some pretty deep questions, which were juxtaposed really nicely with the humor of knowing many of the people you’re talking about. Stylistically, that’s fantastic! Really, nicely done.
Your introduction is so good! The moment I read the first sentence, I was instantly hooked. And I completely agree with it! You find out who you are as well as who are your friends are during a major life event. The introduction definitely fulfills my expectations from the coverpage, in fact, it was better. I like that you thoroughly explained what Dr. Phil’s and Jerry Springer’s roles in your story were. The questions you asked like “Does he love her? Does she love him?” made me really want to read your story because that’s a question I want answered too! The pictures you used were great too because it helped me visualize the story. However, the very last picture on the bottom left looks like it is cut off. This seems like a small alignment issue that you can easily fix—unless it was intentionally placed! Well, it looks to me like you spent a lot of time developing your storybook and adding details. I love the post-“happily ever after” approach you took.
ReplyDeleteHi Kirsten!
ReplyDeleteYour story book introduction was awesome! It had me hooked from the beginning and wanting to find out what it was all about. I love that you chose Dr. Phil as more of a therapeutic character for your storybook. I also like how you threw Jerry Springer in there as more of a “let them fight it out in the name of great television” kind of character. I like the idea of doing an after the fact of Aesop’s characters! It is really a neat idea to be able to see what they are doing now. It reminds me of Dr.Phil and Jerry Springer’s shows because every now and then they look back on old participants of their show. I also like how you gave the character’s slightly different identities by making them hockey players or Supernatural characters. That was a very nice touch. I can’t wait to see the finished project!
Hey Kirsten,
ReplyDeleteYour introduction really pulled me in to your storybook. What an interesting concept with Dr. Phil and Jerry Springer. I like that you already have everything all planned out and you gave a blurb about each story in the introduction that was short, sweet, and to the point to give me an idea of everything that is ahead. Your blog is very pleasing to the eye and easy to read.
In your first story, the use of animal characters really gave a twist to the real life version of Jerry Springer. The spacing in your stories made it easy to follow and keeps the readers attention. Your links work and the grammar is great! The pictures also do a great job at representing what the story is about and gives me an idea to base the story off of. I loved the tweets of your story, too because it turned an older story into a very modern story that our society can relate to. Great job and I look forward to reading more in your storybook in the future.
Hi Kirsten,
ReplyDeleteYour story book is very nice. You have so many different parts that work so well together. Ill start with your intro. This idea is pure gold. I love that these people will be a part of a talk show. even though I really liked the idea at first I was a little worried because a talk show involves... talking and that is something that people have a very hard time writing. However my fears were extinguished as soon as I started to read your first story. You did a fantastic job writing dialog. I also felt like was really watching the Jerry Springer as I was reading your work. your attention to small details, like the blue cards and the security guards, really helped to make me feel like i was there. also your sense of humor was on point in this. I almost lost it at that part about the tweet. very good job. I will have to come back to read your other stories.
Hey Kristen, I have to say your storybook is great!! I really enjoy how you combined the story of the farmer and stork and the jerry springer show. It shows how creative you can really be. Reading your first story really reminded me of the jerry springer show. The descriptive language shows me that you really know the show well because when you describe things, it is what I remember the show being like.
ReplyDeleteI do have to say I am excited to see what Dr. Phil’s show will be like with the story of the farmer and stork. As for your writing and grammar it is great! The spacing and the way you formatted the whole story really helped me keep up with the story. Again I would let you know how good of a job you have done by being so creative in combing the show and the story. Your storybook is a one of kind. Keep up the good work!
I really like your storybook concept, Kirsten. It’s very creative and fun. Your recreation of a Jerry Springer episode is spot-on and very well done. I almost feel like I am back in 7th grade watching an episode after school. I can’t wait to see how you do the Dr. Phil stories. I’m sure it will be amusing.
ReplyDeleteYour writing is very good and super easy to follow. I did not notice any grammatical mistakes at all. Your stories have just the right amount of detail and are very engaging. I think you did a great job of setting up your stories in the introduction as well. The only criticism I can make is about your character assignments. I’m not familiar with all of the famous personas you chose and it is distracting from your story. I feel like there are back stories with the characters that I am missing out on. Although I must admit that the images really helped me form a mental picture of the events of the story.
Its always nice to read good writing and I really enjoyed reading your storybook so far. I can’t wait for the next episode! It seems like you have a lot of stories you want to tell.
Hello, again!
ReplyDeleteI already mentioned to you how creative I thought your storybook theme was, but I just want to reiterate—great thinking! Seeing how you’ve put that idea into practice is really great. I can’t wait to see some of those characters that I am familiar with.
I think it was probably a good idea for you to put your author’s note at the beginning of the story. Although I think most people are at least familiar with whom Jerry Springer is, giving them a little better idea before you start the story is nice. I have to admit, it was a little confusing that he switched between a human and an animal. But, I think you mostly cleared it up at the end when you mention him learning to switch between forms. I would go back and look over your punctuation, there were missing commas.
On the whole, great job! Excited to see more!
Hi Kirsten nice to see you again,
ReplyDeleteafter reading your story book last week i just had to come back. your stories are just to funny. like i think that even if i was not in this class i would still read these because they are just that good. the way that you describe everything, I really fell like i am sitting at home watching Jerry Springer. Not only is your writing good but so are your stories. the tweets in between had me laughing so hard I can just picture this guy at work watching this. also #pleasedontleaveme haha. i am glad that you used the new spock and kirck because i agree that they would actually fight like this. i had no idea how you were going to finish this but the proposal at the end was just to good. very good job I cant wait to read more.
Hey, Kirsten,
ReplyDeleteGREAT job. I love this storybook. I think it's my favorite one that I've read so far. You do a great job pulling the reader into your style of writing. Your creativity is so expansive and really keeps me engaged the entire time. And not just with a single story, but for the whole storybook. Your images are nothing less than perfect, too. I especially like your use of the tweets. Instead of just saying what they were, you actually included an image, which was nice. The author's note at the beginning of one of your stories was a great touch, too. Not everyone may know who Jerry is, but having this just in case was a smart move. The layout of the stories themselves also made them easy to follow, which I appreciate. This isn't always the case, but your book just seems to have the full package.
Overall, WONDERFUL job and I hope you have a great rest of your semester!
hey Kirsten,
ReplyDeleteI have found my self back at your story book once again. I have been checking back each week after reading for the first time. this is because, dont tell anyone, you story book is probably my favorite. you are a very good writer and your stories are always loaded. they have everything that a good story needs they have good dialog. they are very descriptive. they have good plot lines and they have humor. I am so glad that you added a third because after reading your first two i was hooked. for this story i really liked how you brought a more emotional side. by the end of it i really felt bad for him. but i think my favorite part was at the very end where you say to watch the show on dvd cause netflix changed the music. i never knew they could do that. as always good job and keep up the good work.
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ReplyDeleteI read through all of your storybook in one sitting! It was so good! I've never actually seen Jerry Springer or Dr. Phil, so both were totally new to me. The idea behind your storybook was just so creative. I really liked how you kind of brought these old stories and twisted them in such a way that they are immediately recognizable to those who keep up with the modern culture of today. (Even though I've never seen the shows, I like to think I know what they are.) You are a very good writer. It was easy to see that you are having a lot of fun with your storybook each week by how you write and how the characters and their interactions have a lot of life in them. Also, the layout of your storybook was really easy to follow. It makes your stories a lot easier to read just because everything is so well put together! Great job and good luck with the rest of the semester!
DeleteHi Kirsten! First off, what a cute happy penguin! Anyways, I just came here to tell you how much I have loved reading your work throughout the semester. It is evident how much thought, effort, and editing has gone into your work. I love reading everything you produce, and it is all really good! Also, I enjoy reading your comments because they are both entertaining and helpful! I wanted to go out of my way to tell you that I appreciate all that you have done this semester, and will continue to do :) Good luck with the rest of your academic pursuits!
ReplyDeleteHello Kristen,
ReplyDeleteFirst of all I am so upset that this is the first time I come across your storybook! What a unique idea! I would have never thought of doing a script mimicking the Dr.Phil show. I watched this show growing up a lot when I could not find anything else that was interesting to watch. You did not disappoint. Your storybook is just as interesting as the actual show! You allow the reader to have so much information that lets us know exactly what is going on. Your images are also great as they allowed me to really visualize the characters. I read over your introduction and your first story. Wow! The first story was in great shape and it was so entertaining. It felt like I could have been watching this on TV. I think that your descriptive abilities are what engaged me the most. When jerry would say something and then there would be a description afterwards it was as if I was reading a written form of the tv show. Anyways, great job! I wish I had more time to continue reading your project. It is so good!
I was impressed with your way of taking something from folklore and giving it a modern touch, such as Dr. Phil. I found this comical at times. It made me think of all of the original storybook characters and how they might need counseling. I thought your layout was very fitting. I also liked how you used pictures of modern well known people in your stories. I was able to set the scene being familiar with TV shows like Jerry Springer. I think this made you more connected to your audience because it is something we are familiar with. I think you did a good job on your revisions. I did not find any grammatical errors. I enjoyed your story book and was always able to get a good laugh. I like your style of writing and admire the creativity it took to turn folklore into a talk show. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteHello Kristen,
ReplyDeleteThis week as I am wrapping up my work this class I remembered that there was a really unique project using Dr. Phil. It took me while to find it but I have found you again and I was so excited!! This week I read your last story because I wanted to see how you had finished off your project. Once again I was highly highly impressed with how much creativity you have. I mean, WOW! I could never come up with something as good as that. I really enjoy how you go to the point in what you are trying to say so that we are not too lost in words. However, I wish that there would have been more history or background to the original story and what you did you "change" it or fi your retelling was just setting this original story into the script of a Dr.Phil show. Anyhow, the work that you did was excellent. Good luck with finals!